Miserable

by Synh   May 4, 2007


I barely remember the love of sol
How warm it was against my back
Greater taste than fresh fruit in a bowl
An exquisite thing in a pale shack

So... when did everything suddenly go black?
Clouded by grey, bleak skies
How did I get so far off track?
Engulfed by a world created by lies

Look deep into these brown eyes
Please, say that you can find me
Before my soul collapses and dies
Don't leave me to drown at sea

Like you, I want to be free
To escape from being insane
Help me to let go of this misery
Take away my indescribable pain

I know you have nothing to gain
You have already left me behind
But lie about just one more thing
Lie and promise me that you tried

And before you leave and finally move on
Tell me, please, where has my heart gone?

*My use of the word 'sol' is not the Roman god. It's the Latin word for 'sun'. I am NOT talking about the god, hence forth, i am NOT capitalizing it. So telling me to.

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  • 17 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Good poem overall, I also wondered what was that sol and in the end I knew :) Thats good you mentioned. Kepp up the good work :)

    Tc

  • 17 years ago

    by Dee

    Great choice of words, it has a wounderful flow.... keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Excellent piece with an awsome flow and nicely rhyming stanzas. Superb poetry 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    Excellent piece with an awsome flow and nicely rhyming stanzas. Superb poetry 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Look deep into these brown eyes
    Please, say that you can find me
    [[Oh. Damn.]]

    I really liked it, espically the last stanza; nice touch. However, I really disliked the first stanza. It's a real killer. =/

    The rhyming was beautiful and I didn't have a problem with the flow, so, nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5