I think it's a bit forced.
For example, the first stanza.
You wished you were dead
Because someone was playing
With your head?
Hmm...
Second and third line was fantastic.
Especially the third.
It was a real twist.
I didn't know that the guy
Actually hits the girl.
It seemed kind of story like
But not really.
I like it, but I don't love it
Anywayz,
5/5 :]

Wow.
Wonderful job, though it was heartbreaking to read. I hate knowing that this kind of thing actually happens in real life. The flow was flawless & the story within the poem was fabulous. Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

I loved this poem. It truely came form ur heart. I hope this isn't really happening to you though. If it is, get out and get out now. You deserve better than this. If you don't leave soon you might leave against your will. and i don't mean him leaving you. Don't torchure youself and let him put you down. we are women and we are stronger than men. Be strong chicka
i hope all is well
great great job!

love,
~Shannon~

Some of it seem al ittle forced, but mostly the flow is great. For some reason the last stanza doensn't seem to fit perfectly in the poem, It is like there is something off in it somewhere. I can't figure it out, maybe its just me, anyway 4/5

Great write.....its has a great flow which just makes you wanna read it over again...keep up the work!!