I really like reading songs on this site, and you wrote a pretty good one.
i wish some of the verses had been longer though
nice work.
my friend bleed4eternity writes songs too if you want to check him out

"About your life that's following apart at the seams"
^^ this line confused me a bit ? maybe just change the word "following" it didn't make sense!!

you have a way with words : ) i loved these lyrics i could hear maybe a slower beat like one from Hinders songs or Theory of a Deadman anyway lol i liked the imagery and i liked the repetition of just taking different situations to emphasize your point.

great job : ) 5/5