by DavidBrendan May 5, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Black ties and white t-shirts, we're swinging now |
by Tara Kay
Yeah, i liked it. |
by Vanessa
The word choice was simple yet effective, the emtion was strong, the flow was a tad bit off, but it didn't take away from the depyhs of this poem. you have done an outstanding job take a bow for you have just stolen the show, 5/5 |
Wow.. i really liked this poem.. the whole topic is just very original and interesting to read.. i love the last lines they fit so perfectly.. the word choice was nice the only problem i came across was a couple of flow problems.. some lines seemed to have too many syllables for the rhythm |