Wow.. i really liked this poem.. the whole topic is just very original and interesting to read.. i love the last lines they fit so perfectly.. the word choice was nice the only problem i came across was a couple of flow problems.. some lines seemed to have too many syllables for the rhythm

The word choice was simple yet effective, the emtion was strong, the flow was a tad bit off, but it didn't take away from the depyhs of this poem. you have done an outstanding job take a bow for you have just stolen the show, 5/5

Yeah, i liked it.
The flow wasnt perfect, but that just adds to the poem, it made sense most of the way throughout.
I enjoyed the originality of it, well done
best wishes
Tara-Kay