WOW this was amazing! wish you describe the setting a little bit more :P but anyway it was good! Flow was smooth! well done

I like this line
"A million stars away with a barren heart."

And good choice of words! :)

Word choice was excellent. the flow was like water. the emtions clear, and deep. A couple of the lines didn't seem like they fit. reading your poem outloud will hep you see witch ones I am talking about. The rhyming was perfect, but it felt forced in one or two places.
Other tahn that I loved this peice, wonderfully written, by another intellegent writter. 5/5

This was a good poem, the story at first was hard to follow but the ending summed it up well good job keep up the good work Plot121