Nice poem, the repitition was nice, the flow was good, although the enidng could have been more creative, but it was ok, so good job.

Hey, guys 10x for the comments. Im happy u liked it. Im actually not posting anything here to see if it has any poetic value or so but just to share it with ppl. So if u enjoyed reading it thats the most important n not if it was well written. Im sticking to the content rather than the shape as long as it sounds good and makes sense its ok. Besides, mind that Im not an english native speaker so excuse me if my words are simple or anything....