Omg that is an intense poem... i think u should get some help, I feel that this poem ges the reader in the position of the girl in the poem, very well writen.

I really liked this poem...well the message because I thought the poem itself needed more advanced words or emotion either or would improve it I give it a 4 nice job though

Wow i loved it...has a real strong inpact on the reader.
You rearly know how to push the emotions into your work
5/5
Again beautiful

Xx Lucifer xX

Amazing wright. good repetition.

Honest comment ok, this poem needed more words in each line. it seemed it was a bit short and a tad rushed. but i still loved this poem. don't get me wrong.

the pain and suffering in this poem was amazing. how you described it was excellent.

5/5 David

Beautiful write!...i liked the repetition used...it gave the poem a better effect...the words used could hv been stronger though...but all the same..It's great!...just luv...the poem is better as it is!..Kp up the good job!

Its like a lyrics from the songs and i like the way u repeating ur lines,, and it flowed well! its a marvelous work of u girl and i think its totally amazing and its has a great rhyme... excellent job5/5

Oh my god! That was so flippin fantastic! I could feel the pain pouring out through every word. The emotions were clear & strong & the flow was flawless. You truly are a fabulous writer, please keep writing! ;] 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Woahhh that was extreme, well written nice flow. So much pain and emotion it was just intense. Once again well done this really pulled some heart strings looking forward to reading more. Keep it up :)

Great poem! nice rhyimg the flow was smooth! I enjoyed this one! good job! good repetition too! well done! keep writing! :)

Beautifully written, with a wonderful use of repetition.

The rhyming was a tad forced in places, but not enough for it to ruin the poem.

Exellent. I loved it.

How amazing is that? People find beauty and self expression even in the worst of circumstances.

Which is precisely what you did here.

Honestly, I am glad I read this. I really enjoyed it.

Wow. very poewrful. you are so talented. keep it up

I really liked the images and the way you portaited everything. the only thing was the second to the last papargraph well it some how moved it off metor but none the less a good write. Good job Plot121

A very cool, cold, sad sad poem. But I liked it. Keep it up you are a great writer. 5/5

Wow.. this is really sad.. also i like how you repeat the same stanza with slight changes through the poem.. the flow was really great as well as the word choice and rhyme scheme..

Wow...this poem was great. I loved the repetition and the flow was great. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson