Got There First (acrostic) (contest)

Such a sweet and innocent love poem. This poem just glows with a pureness that helps to spread your message. I really enjoyed how you didn't make each word its own stanza even though it was broken up, you decided to continue with the flow that you had already set up. I think that my favourite part of this poem was how you repeated. "You got there first" both at the beginning but also at the end. It helped the reader see the power and passion and feelings toward this person. I think that the only thing I would change out of the poem is the second last line instead of saying "You got there first" I would change it to possibly the same thing but in different words that way it helps make the last line stronger. Nice write overall though. 5/5

'Generosity a virtue, forever my all,
Obscure imagination, stood me up tall.
Took the chance, you got there first'

Set's up the story of love.
A good intro for it's purpose.

'Taken aback when i saw your worst.
Highest of mountains we climbed on top,
Each and every river we swam across.
Reached for the peak of our love,
Energy ecstatic, rumors we rose above.'

Caps that I please. You held a consistency of the O vowel, which made it flow much better as you described an ever present situation within true love.

'Fighter for strength, flying so high,
Imagining were birds, floating in the sky.
Realizing my risks, allowed you to share,
Shared my love, you got there first.
Thank you, you got there first.'

I was taken aback by lack of the consistency of the vowel sound, but it didn't bother me seeing as the vowel sounds for this particular portion suited each line together.

Change that were to we're for grammer's sake.

Please tell me what you meant by first?
(Good poem btw)

Great vocabulary
you have a really strong passion i can tell
nice work
i loved it
as always

This poem is really good for an acrostic... however.. you can tell that it is.. the flow is a little bumpy at times and mostly becuase it shows that you had some trouble finding the right word to match the given letter.. however.. other than that.. it still was an enjoyable read

The work here is really great The flow was good but the ending was abit disappointing I mean it just ended abruptly. It was a good poem but the end was abit off but a good poem none the less Plot121