Eh..its ok

Like i've already said on Bryans account, I found this peice to be beautifully written with a nice flow and sweet emotions which rain throughout the whole thing nicely. Good effot with this. ~mel

I thought this poem was amazing. probably one of my favorites now. keep up the amazing work!

Beautiful. A heart rendering piece; you have used vivid imagery to deliver the message within this poem, and I must say it was delivered wonderfully through the constant rhyme that worked its way throughout. The only thing I'd suggest for improvement would be for this line:
"I can't stop thinking of her beauty and laugh"
As opposed to writing 'beauty and laugh', I would suggest alternating it to:
I can't stop thinking of her beauty, her laugh".
I think it becomes more effective as you are then using another poetic tool of repetition. Other than that, there are a couple of areas where minor adjustments such as proper grammar should be applied; but on a whole this is a well written and solid piece. Very well done :).

I love it

Excellent poem