by ImNotPerfect20 May 7, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
I am lost between two |
by claire
Yeah this poems really choppy, but i like the format (the whole syllable thing) i have a really hard time sticking to most structures, especially complicated ones. cool poem! |
by BreeAnna
Life is not perfect. no one's is... no matter how much we fabricate things. one day you will find a guy that loves you for you no matter what kind of girl you are... something a friend told me.. you need to love yourself before you can love someone else. I am not saying that you dont.. just wanted to share that with you. hope things work out. great work. |
by Allison
Wonderful read dear! I've felt like the girl in the poem and its no fun. Keep writing. *5/5* |
I like that you tried something different, it's evident that you tried hard with this piece, and I like that. I don't know why, but for me it doesn't seem to read like a poem. I think the flow could maybe have been a little better? But overall, it was well written. |
This is one of your better ones I have to say. I really like this one. Great job. Flow is overall much better and word choice is good. 5/5! |