Hey i love this poem. a lot of people can relate to it and the words really flow.

Don't we all get that way with a friend? Oh yes we do. I really liked how you portrayed this poem like you've done. 5/5

This reminds me of films like mean girls and american pie. Its not reallylthat bad in the uk but i still get this poem. I love the way you use your voice to raise issues about this and how people react to it. Well done keep up the good work hunni xxx alex xxx

As you already know, I love this poem. You used great words and imagery and really drew me into it. Great job Darling.

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The imagery in this was excellent. It really helped to place a vivid image of this girl in my head.

"Blonde hair and blue eyes, with a heart of plated gold-
No one could ever imagine that she could be so cold.
Blue-eyed icy stares, filled with such aggression;
Her faithful followers trail like a funeral procession."

^ I loved this stanza. It was a perfect opening. I especially loved the simile at the end.

"You and her was always seen playing around." = 'You and here [were] always seen playing around.'

"You relied on her, as did she relied on you." = That 'did' is not needed.

"Memories faded 'til she was only just a name."

^ I loved that line.

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Hmm. the words behind it carried emotion and a sad story. nicely down.