by Robert May 8, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
She did, finding charm in his manner and style, |
by Jenni Marie
Okay, say it with me. Spacing. Lol. |
by Miranda
Great poem.I think you should try some more complex rhymes next time.These ones were too simple.Example:lips,hips. |
Very interesting story behind a poem, it kept my attention from the beginning to the end. I like the way you wrote it, and created good flow with rhymes. |
by Wallace
Wow that was very emotional. But the punctuation needs to be improved. I dont like reading poems without proper verses, it looks more like a story than a poem. However, a good job in the end. But I'll give it a 4/5 just because of the lack of verses. |
I really liked it. It really touched me. Great job!!! |