Comments : Spread the news (Tale of a murder)

  • 17 years ago

    by Luis Sousa

    Homicide!
    finaly u changed ur modus operativus!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh I frikken ADORE this!
    The opening stanza was so strong, it really pulled me in and from there on it just got better and better.
    Flow was flawless throughout, imagery created vivid ictures and word choice and the rhyme scheme were a pleasure to read.
    I loved the ending, I found it to be very intense and hard hitting.

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    And there I go, singing the blues
    They're telling my life, spreading the news
    [[I really liked the first lines. It drew me in.]]
    There is no tree without a seed
    [[I LOVED this line. May I use it, by chance?]]
    Be careful with the things you tell
    Secrets aren't something you can sell
    [[Again, I LOVED this line. I'm about to steal your quotes. XD Just kidding! Don't worry, I won't.]]

    I really liked this.
    Perhaps you should make it longer though; you had some good stuff in it, it just seemed way too short. Why'd you kill her? When? Ect.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5