This is really good. you have a way with words. i can totally relate to this. keep it up

The is really good. I feel all of the emotion.

Wow.
Hun, that was amazing. The emotions were pouring out of every word - so heart breaking to read. The descriptions were vivid & the flow was flawless. What's even better is that I can relate to this poem so much... =/

"Dangerously pressed against my skin
Ending my eternal misery
Evading the dark demons within
Pain setting them free"

^ I love that stanza. :] So unique & creative. Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Wow that was a realy good poem i love it !!!
thanks for the commnet on mine !!! love linda 5/5

Awesome poem. I don't see why more people have not rated it, anyways keep up the great work. I love your poems:) 5/5

A brilliant poem. Congratulations on winning the club contest! :) It definately deserved to win. Anyways the first stanza was good, i thought it went straight to the point, from the begining. I like the aliteration, "dark demons" it works brilliantly to describe self harm. The third stanza was brilliant, "Broken, battered, bloody" this alliteration worked excellently, and really helped the flow of the poem. The last stanza, deaths never the only way out (and yes this is coming form someone who's prvious user name was contemplating suicide). But yeah i can relate to this poem brilliantly and i think thats why i enjoyed it even more. The last line is really sad. A brilliant acrostic. To improve it i suggest using punctuation. Other then thata good read. xx

The acrostic technique seems to work quite well here. It's more subtle and doesn't affect the overall meaning of the poem. I especially like the imagery in the second stanza.

Great acrostic!!...so beautifully framedand the opening and last line added to the beauty and so did the use of alliteration
"Chaotic thoughts, corrupted mind
Untie the ribbons of my soul
Thinking of a simpler time
Secrets that you do not know"

this stanza added depth to the poem.and clearly penned desciptions which makes this work amazing!...kp it up!

This is my favourite poem of yours that I've read. A rhyming acrostic? Well done! The words just flowed brilliantly. It was a pleasure to read. :]

Wow. Now this is a nice change. You took a cliche topic and made it not so cliche. It still is a little bit, but it's very good.

Also, I admire this poem because I can't write a good Acrostic to save my life. You did it flawlessly, and with rhyming. Nicely done. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I like this poem. i could really relate to wut you said...its really good..i admire ur writin...

That is sooo good but very scary and still good mmm has this ever happend to you????

A very deep poem and very well written...
i can sadly relate to it...
5/5
*isabel*

Wow this was so sad yet it didnt seem forced at all like most acrostic poems do. I'm not usually a huge fan of cutting poems but some of the words that you used were very powerful and I loved them. I hope that you dont cut yourself and if you do then I hope that you get better soon, take care, and take care of yourself.