The Desires of Death

This is a good poem but atmosphere and imagery could be stronger. It is interesting but I don't understand what this poem is about. It is interesting but it isn't the best sad poem that I read.

I know I comment on this before but just had to do it again. You got 3rd place in my contest with this poem excellent poem Thanks for makeing me look at the love poems differently

Very well written. Great imagery great use of vocab. You're very talented keep it up!!

Well i wuite enjoyed this poem. I liked the title, it drew the reader in. "The Desire For Death" youve kinda used alliteration there. Ok well the first stanza captures the readers attention as the you have a rhyme scheme there. The seopund stanza seems really dark, and it makes the reader wonder whats happening. The third stanza, well the words "leaps and it dances2 completely contradict the next words, "inflicting pain and torment" its kinda weird having these two phrases in the same stanza. But i liked it. It extended the point your making. Worked wonderfully. I loved the vocabulary in the next stanza. Quite unique. The stanza after that you used rhyme again. You ddidnt really have a scheme going on hear. On some parts you used rhyme and on others you didnt. I didnt like this. But well the netire poem seems quite dark. Excellent vocabulary used. To improve this, i suggest you use punctuation. Other then that a great read. Keep it up! xx

Wow, I loved this. You use many spphisticated words, which helps in visualization. Thank you for the coomet. I have thoroughly 'checked out' your poems, and this one is my favorite.