by ImNotPerfect20 May 9, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
It just does not work, |
by Lozbi
Its there under the surface of this lie << that line i think u need to put a comma apart "there". |
I can totally relate and i understand what you are feeling the emotion in the poem is a very good thing it makes the reader actually feel the poem another5/5 |
by Tara Kay
I like free verse poems, and i like poems that rhyme but ones that mix, dont really work all that well, just my opinion. But apart from that and the grammar and so on, it was good. I liked the emotion and i enjoyed it. |
So awfully lovely I really love this poem omg... MAKE MORE lol.. thanx for your comment ......-------->LOVE IT<------ |
by RetroRavey
It was a bit emotional... but isn't that what peotry is all about? |