This is so scary, you got everyone of my emotions out in this. everything i felt when he broke up with me, everything that was going through me head is in this poem. this is amazing, there's SO much emotion, and you organized it so well, it flowed well, and the rhyming didn;t seem forced at all! im still amazed that you felt the exact same things as me, how hurt, and mad i was at the same time, i still love him... oh well, this isn't about me... great job with this, i wish i could give it more than a 5... o well, 5/5

Oops, i forgot to give you props for getting out so well without jumping around, that was my problem, and you did it perfectly!
jealousy!!!!!

I really liked this...the pain and depth scream through the words and at at the same time you can feel anger radaiting from them as well.
Very emotional and very moving.

I think you did a good job getting your point across. If there are grammer errors you may correct them latter, what matters is that you shared your honest feelings

Well I HELD myself never let you degrade me.

I love that line. That is definitely the way to be. Great job and great way to write about it.. let it all out. Very nice poem and you can deff feel the anger and emotions coming out. Nice job. Keep it up and thanks for the comments =]

Meh loving this poem shows strength in anger. im going through the same thing. i loved this message and just everything reading this made me not want to lose one single syllable

The pain portrayed throughout this poem was amazingly beautiful, in a sad way of course. One think i wasnt keen on was the capitalization of words throughout it. but thats just my own personal opinion when i view a poem. The flow was great. It kept me interested throughout the whole thing. Well done~mel

I keep telling myself to forget you
But my heart would not let go.

You stop talking for a week
Then the next week you talk again.
Expecting me to LISTEN!
Hurting me worse then ever

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah its awsome my freind. it makes me so touchy. it realy touched my heart. becoz i think somewhere it realy relates to me. i loved your this poem take care 5/5

This one flows well n the capitalized words convey strong meanings. Good piece. tc

I really liked on how your poem flowed.. you wrote it from your heart.. I CAN TELL because of all the emtion that's being said.. well there was some grammar errors, but it has no effect whatsoever.. but anyway good job and keep up the good work ..

It does not exist[[.]] < add period.
more then you know<than.
But[[,]] my heart would not let go.< comma.
worse then ever[[.]]< period & than.
Stanza's 3 & ^ need punctuation.

DONT come crawling back
Saying you love me I wont take you back
^ don't like those two lines.
take out ' saying you love me' ?

good job, overall.
a bit of puncutation and grammar will do the trick.
4/5

Many people complain about the grammer of poems but that isn't the message in the poem, maybe if people noticed the words and not what punctuation was missing they would enjoy the read. The poem was missing punctuation but who cares honestly, it was a great write. I liked the emotion in the poem and how you capatalized important words. Excellent job 5/5

There was some grammar errors but I do the same thing, i mean who really cares and i loved the topic and the meaning behind it all was very well put, also a great job, 5/5

This is so packed full of hatred and anger, I can feel it through the computer lol. This is another really good one. I like it a whole whole ton!! Great job!! The flow overall isn't bad and the word choice was pretty good!! 5/5

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Wow.... very strong.. deep and beautifully and sadly written. great job.

I could feel the emotions in this poem and the flow was nice. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Excellent piece with brimming emotions and feelings. The flow is awsome and I read it with all my heart. Great 5/5

This is an amazing poem. It is so sad. You must have been really hurt. Thats so sad. Sounded like it came from the heart. Awesome poem. It was really really good!5/5

`-jackie.

HOLY! omg this poem is EXACTLY like mine "DREADED INNOCENCE" u should check it out...i think we can REALLY relate to eachother!meh this sucks...this poem made me really emotional...grr i know exactly what ur going through...wanting to let go but still having feelings, him being with some1 else yet showing he still has feeling, never given him ur innocence and just being able to gloat about it!!!I loved it!

Wow..girl power..i like your attitude..if only all girls gave der exs such answers! das really sad poem...and i loved it for its sternness =] nice flow...dont have rhymes but still good! nuff luvv xx