Comments : Beautiful Memories...

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Lovely poem....sooo beautiful...a great dedication..Well done!and the imagery creatd is also nice!...Good wrk!Kp it up!
    I give a 5/5!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 17 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    This is wonderful! really beautiful.. keep up the great work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Awesome poem. I really did love it, because it has a nice flow and I liked the words you used. Keep up the great work:) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I love nature poems and thats why i decided to read this last lol. Anyways i have to say i loved this poem. The begining of the poem you use alliteration straight away, "sun shines smile" i really liked this. It engages the reader. I liked how you dedicated this poem to your brother. Im sure he would of loved to read it. And he'd be very proud of his sis! ;) So its a really sweet read. And for an nature poem very emotional! An amazing read hun. Keep it up! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    It is so sweet of you to write such a great poem for your brother, i love your comparision through out the poem, great job as always.
    keep up the great work, and off course a 5/5 as you really deserve it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This is so sweet. Your comparsion though out the poem was diffrent, and excellent. It is touching that you wrote/dedcaited this poem for your brother. The emtion was strong and deep. excellent work.

  • 17 years ago

    by amanda flood

    Ah how sweet, ure bro means a hell of a lot to you well done that was lovely 5-5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I'm sorry that your brother is gone.
    But remembering the good times
    like this poem, is great!
    This poem showed everything good
    about nature and spending outdoors
    with a loved one
    very well written!

  • 17 years ago

    by bleeding limegrenn

    Thats too bad im sorry but he will live on in your heart 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Nice poem. I like it ,has nature theme and a
    wonderful memory, expression.5/5.

    Best wishes.

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hm.
    I'm disliking the non-rhyming, again. It really would have flowed beautifully if it had rhymed.

    But, anyways, it was beautiful nonetheless. The description was strong, the use of words was quite catching, and it flowed very nicely.

    Though, is this supposed to be multipul Haikus? If so, a few of the syllables are off.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was a beautifull dedication. I loved it alot and enjoyed it being a nature poem. Im unsure if this is supose to be multiple haikus. If it is the syllable counts off in some parts, if not ignore that lol. Loved this poem. Well done~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I'm sorry for your lost :( Well keep in mind you're brother is proud for you. Anyway

    The flow was okay for me. I like the imagery running in this poem. Fantastic work! And I like the ending. Well done! keep up the good work! You're really talented!

  • 17 years ago

    by BreeAnna

    Sorry for the loss hun! life is tough sometunes. I think u did a good job with this one.
    Bree

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is so beautiful...
    The imagery portrayed in this created very vivid pictures, and the emotion and depth behind the words are clear for all to see.
    You did a wonderful job with this.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lozbi

    This is absolutely stunning! Such a beautiful poem! The imagery is very well done also! 5/5
    .x

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Great poem, beautifully penned. I like the imagery in it, it's truly wonderful. It deserves 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Very beautiful and heartfelt poem. I think it's a great way to show your love for your brother and I'm sorry for your loss. Although, the flow was a little off here it was still a great read. 5/5

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    Amazingly written poem. It is very touching. Imagery is excellent. I really enjoyed in this piece. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Princess of snow

    Lovely. This piece when I read it was
    great, I like how it flows so nicely
    together. I give a 5/5!