Forgotten Dreams (Huitain)

by Italian Stallion   May 9, 2007


Thoughts of you wander through my dream.
Memories of us, disappear,
As I awake and give a scream.
It seems to be simple and clear,
These dreams I have just disappear.
For I'm not dreaming, it is real.
For you, my one true love is here.
And that's the way I truly feel.

*Written for a contest*

© Copyright 2007 By: Italian Stallion

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The Huitain is a French verse form consisting of an eight-line stanza with 8 or 10 syllables in each line. The form was written on three rhymes, one of which appeared four times. Typical rhyme schemes were ababbcbc and abbaacac.
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  • 17 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    I think that this is a good write. the first 3 lines have me captivated, but the interesting(ness) seems to decline with the structure. or maybe its me.. GW

    Tom

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Another greatly written poem by you. as always you have done a great job and i really like the style, you have done a mastery job on it.keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I loved this and the way you were able to hold your emotions through it, especially given that it was a strict style as well. I did, however, notice one thing that stuck out to me. In the first line, should "wonder" be "wander"? I just think that word fits better. Other than that, I couldn't find anything wrong with it, great job Darling.

    5.5
    =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Shad0w0faPh30n1x

    Um there might be an error, there is only 7 lines in this poem where there is supposed to be 8, and line 4 has 9 syllables!!! other than that its great, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!!

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