Um there might be an error, there is only 7 lines in this poem where there is supposed to be 8, and line 4 has 9 syllables!!! other than that its great, i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!!

I loved this and the way you were able to hold your emotions through it, especially given that it was a strict style as well. I did, however, notice one thing that stuck out to me. In the first line, should "wonder" be "wander"? I just think that word fits better. Other than that, I couldn't find anything wrong with it, great job Darling.

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Another greatly written poem by you. as always you have done a great job and i really like the style, you have done a mastery job on it.keep it up

I think that this is a good write. the first 3 lines have me captivated, but the interesting(ness) seems to decline with the structure. or maybe its me.. GW

Tom