Yet another good poem. The 3rd stanza messed up the flow a little bit but that happens. A perfect length to keep the feeling, get your point across and not leave the reader hanging. A treat to read, I felt like I was truly there, it completely absorbed my mind while reading. excellent.

First of all, before I give the full comment, I must comment on the title which i believe should appear: "My Fathers' Death" if I'm not mistaken. If I am, ignore this section of the comment =]

I really enjoyed this poem
the third stanza was a little week though
but oh well great poem

Wow.. so much emotion in this.. i felt tears in my eyes throughout this!.. good job.. a great read.. keep up the great work!!! 5/5

I liked this one too. Though it is very sad. I could feel the sadness through your words. Another 5/5

For me this is totallyperfect coz honestly i know the feeling how to loss a love ones.. and it really hard feelings.. atleast this comes to ur heart and it has a true feelings so 100% sadness,, and at the same time i can relate. 5/5 thanks for sharing

Very sad poem-- but it also really follows a story line. It reads just like a story, but with rhythm. Nicely written.

Amazing. the flow was great except the 3rd stanza threw me off a little but then i got back on track. its sad but written really good!

Lovely poem

Wow, such a saddening poem. I'm so sorry for your loss. But I like how you manage to put your experiences into beautifully formed writing.

"I felt arms around me in embrace
I longed to just break free
The tears still rolling down my face
Vision so blurred I couldn't see"

^ This stanza was my favourite. Excellent.

Very sad and great, but throughout the poem you talked about HIM, as in not your father?

I felt like I losing my mind
[I felt like I {was} losing my mind.]

Now, I loved the fact that it flowed so well and I love that it told such a story without confusion. However, the cutting part and such was very cliche..and I hate cliche. Also, around that time in the poem, I didn't feel the emotion anymore; how the blade really felt and so on.
But, I do like how you write. I'm sorry, though, I have to give it a four.
Oh, and also, you have MAJOR punctuation errors. That really bothers me..and it hurts the flow. Try to fix them and the flow would be perfect. =]

xTheEcstaysofSuicidex 4.5

I liked this the only thing that I can see to critique on is when someone is talking I think that you need to add quotation marks just so the reader knows that its someone talking and not just more of the poem. At first I was a little intimidatted(sp?) by the length of this poem but it was very well done. I liked the sence of lose, anger, and sadness and I really liked how it changed to a feeling of understanding and acceptance at the ending. Because you have to learn to accept death and not fight it. Well done.