Flying {Double Tanka}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 9, 2007


For the truth in me,
A small, simple breath within.
Gentle breeze of air,
To chase away lies in me.

I feel like flying,
In a world of new hope.
I wish not to lie --
They weigh me down with burden;
I would much more rather fly.
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Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I loved this poem. It was very refreshing and it felt just like I was flying as I read this. Very short yet you managed to get the point across. "In a world of new hope" that was my favorite line of the poem, so powerful even thoug it was so short. Nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This one is well written, and really an excellent example of a double tanka. Again I admire you for chosing to write in diffrent styles. I like the word chose, and the emtion is strong this time. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Cool one. I have alway associated flying with freedom. I'm glad you wrote a poem about it. Keep up the good work. 5/5

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