Savin' Me

by Jenni Marie   May 10, 2007


Hurting emotionally for so long
Trying my hardest not to fail
Crying silent tears each night
Recalling bitter betrayal.

Many different ways of coping
Each more damaging than the last
Sad smile fixed upon these lips
Thinking of memories past.

Each single day arrived
Thought I would never recover
So overcome with pain
Feeling as though I would smother.

Every single second
Bringing untold pain
Crazy thoughts inside my head
Thought I'd gone insane.

Then you came along
Helped me see the light
Making me finally realize
My future could be so bright.

Took me in your arms
Whispered it'd be okay
Made my pain disappear
Problems just seemed to float away.

After all the years of pain
Who would have thought that I would see
Someone brave, smart and wise
Come along, savin' me?

**For A Contest**
**I wasn't sure if this should be in the love category or sad category.**

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  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Thes lips = these lips

    pan= pain

    =feeling I would smother (this means you are going to smother something, but what are you going to smother? Instead, I suggest you say "Feeling as If I'd be smothered")

    By the way, I think that this should be put under the rekindled love category within the LOve Poems section =] You'll get more comments too!

    I'll rewrite these two lines for you:

    Crazy thoughts inside my head
    -- I thought I'd gone insane...

    ~

    Took me in your arms = took me right into your arms

    dissappear= (sp?)

    Problems seemed to float away. = problems just seemed to float away...

    After all these year of pain = after all these years in pain/ after all the years of pain

    Who would have thought I'd see = who would have thought that I would see

    Good job m'dear. I hope that you win. Just one suggestion, that you add punctuation at the end of your lines within your poetry =] Other than that, this poem is gold.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

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