Thes lips = these lips

pan= pain

=feeling I would smother (this means you are going to smother something, but what are you going to smother? Instead, I suggest you say "Feeling as If I'd be smothered")

By the way, I think that this should be put under the rekindled love category within the LOve Poems section =] You'll get more comments too!

I'll rewrite these two lines for you:

Crazy thoughts inside my head
-- I thought I'd gone insane...

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Took me in your arms = took me right into your arms

dissappear= (sp?)

Problems seemed to float away. = problems just seemed to float away...

After all these year of pain = after all these years in pain/ after all the years of pain

Who would have thought I'd see = who would have thought that I would see

Good job m'dear. I hope that you win. Just one suggestion, that you add punctuation at the end of your lines within your poetry =] Other than that, this poem is gold.

5/5
~Stephen White