Flesh and bone (triolet)

That was short but there is repitition. but it was overall good poem take care 4/5

Wow you managed to say so much with so little in this poem. As opposed to the last one I really liked the ending of this however it was very sad. I hope that this is just a poem and that you and your mother aren't competing in weight, because thats very unhealthy. Take care and nice write.

For such a short poem, you have a lot of power and effectivness in it. The repitition worked well and was not over done. Good job. :)

Cool poem. Keep up the great work. 5/5

I love how you used repetition in your poem, I think it was well done. The rhyming annoyed me a litte but I'm guessing you did it that way because you were trying to follow certain structure. So, good.

In my opinion sometimes it's better to just write a poem without rhyming, I've been trying it for a while, and I'm quite happy with that.

Anyway, keep writing. And let me know when you have a new poem. I will definitely want to read it.

XoXo
Gaby