by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG May 10, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
She stood before him three feet tall and proud, |
by David
I don't know how you got this poem to have swearing in it. cause i thought it could only go in a certain catagory. well i liked this poem. it was so nice to read. i loved how he was forever with her. how he cared so much about her. but there was something more wasn't there? something hidden. |
by just me
Idk about the above two comments. I mean mayb the poem would be more complete with more on how her father changed but......idk i kind of like it how it is.....like a sudden twist....a suprise that jumps out.....catches u off gaurd. Everyone like suprises right? |
"boys were jerks at most" injects a very welcome element of humour into what is quite an emotional and clearly heartfelt piece. That's no easy thing to do, and you've done it smoothly. However, there's a very fractured feeling to it. As said in the previous comment, the flow seems somehow interrupted to me, as though there's a part you edited out... |
by Narphangu
I loved it a lot. |