I loved it a lot.
There was a bit of a rhythm issue from time to time... but nothing too substantial.

I thought it let off fast though. It's like, it's missing one stanza or something.
Cause it's about how much he loves her at first, but then, all of a sudden it shifts so fast, it's not quite right.
I suggest adding in another stanza that's like "but one day she found him...bla bla, etc."
Make sense?

Tell me if you think that's good feedback, or what.

Hope so!

"boys were jerks at most" injects a very welcome element of humour into what is quite an emotional and clearly heartfelt piece. That's no easy thing to do, and you've done it smoothly. However, there's a very fractured feeling to it. As said in the previous comment, the flow seems somehow interrupted to me, as though there's a part you edited out...

A nice read though. Good work!

Idk about the above two comments. I mean mayb the poem would be more complete with more on how her father changed but......idk i kind of like it how it is.....like a sudden twist....a suprise that jumps out.....catches u off gaurd. Everyone like suprises right?
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I don't know how you got this poem to have swearing in it. cause i thought it could only go in a certain catagory. well i liked this poem. it was so nice to read. i loved how he was forever with her. how he cared so much about her. but there was something more wasn't there? something hidden.

5/5 David