Staccato Memories

by AlaSkA   May 11, 2007


Half man half machine,
You'd think I was the one who invented silence.
On the edge of sleep,
Static slides across the television,
Reminds me of your wind chime voice.
Dire dreams, of my life...
Or lack there of.
Obscuring sense of self.
Is it sentient?
Rosencrantz & Guildenstern are dead.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Dispear
    honestly i felt complete
    and utter dispear
    the last moments of this cyborg
    that you created in you mind
    filled me with sorrow
    funny how in just a few lines
    you told a lifetime story
    i could feel hopelessness
    i could feel pain
    i could not feel a fighters will
    and in those finial moments that i felt
    it was as if this creation's life flashed
    before my eyes

    Wow

    thank you for the read.
    it was felt

    (~:SamMayo

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very unique feel to this. Good write, not great though I thought it could be better. Your use of wording was good. Keep it up.

    Peace, Joe

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Half man half machine,
    You'd think I was the one who invented silence.
    [[F-cking amazing. I love these lines; it sounds just like what I would write. ^^]]

    Static slides across the television,
    Reminds me of your wind chime voice.
    [[Again.. I love it. The random (but it fits) description is so capturing . . . ]]

    Dire dreams, of my life...
    Or lack there of.
    [[A little humor? I like it . .]]

    Rosencrantz & Guildenstern are dead.
    [[I'm not going to lie, I do not know who these people are . . ]]

    Thus.
    You should PM me and explain that to me.

    From what I could read and understand, however, I really enjoyed the poem. I loved your metaphors and descriptions; they were creative and definately not cliche. Keep it up.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    I simply love the way you wrote this.
    Thought provoking, unique, strong.
    Worth reading again, and gathering
    a new viewpoint, this is a flexible
    piece to me. Wonderfully done.

    Write On!
    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very interesting poem, the flow and structure where both very well. I liked your choice of words and the way it was all put together to make a short to the point peice of art. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe