by Stephanie Naylor May 11, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
They speak a language |
Wow this was nice. you portayed the emotion well. though it was short and the flow wasn't great, but otherwise another great poem. |
by Vegetable
This is a really good start! I love the last two lines the best. However, I think you could really add to this, and maybe change the order of the stanzas around. As it is, your thoughts seem a little unorganized and don't flow as well as they could. Another, smaller thing- You have some places where you use the wrong their,there,and they're. |