by 3qually M3asur3d May 11, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Why am I the one to be blamed for your sadness |
A good poem, a bit forced though, nice work |
I thought some of the thymes were really good, but some others were a little bit forced. The poem didn't seem to have any set rythem to it. Maybe try putting a pattern or rythem in to make the poem move along. |