by Robert May 12, 2007
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The Rise of the Disc and the Eye, |
by VYXSIN
Lol im not sure that i actually undersatnd this poem, but i like it. its well written and very different to what i normally read. well done. |
5/5 for sure. The flow was good, the story line, even better. I think this puts you on my fave list. I'm expecting a lot of good reads from you. :) |
by Fsams
This is I would say rather a unique poem because the wordings and the metaphors in this piece are different. Different is always good and it reflects your creativity. 5/5 piece |
This was really well done.. the word choice you use in all of your writing is excellent, you have a great way with words, really do. |
I like your usage of rhyme couplets in your poetry The title of the poem and the introduction line made me ownder wehat the poem was baout. The disk and the eye? i wondered what you meant by this. The poem had a good flow but once more i thought your structure could of been improved. I can kinda see what your saying with this poem. And i like this reference you have going on about Egypt. "Little By little" this creates this image of it slowly happeneing. A good read. Really intresting. But to improve this i suggest you use punctuation and work on the structure. Keep writing! xx |