Don't agree with the conclusion whatsoever, but on the whole this is a bittersweet piece of excellent prose. If I may make one suggestion:

"Carefully constructed
Built piece by piece"

The first line infers the method, making the 2nd line redundant. In fact reading that bit again with "Built piece by piece" left out, it sounds better to me. Just a thought, like. :-)

Yay! 5/5 for sure!!!!!!! *smiles*

Oh i do like it very much. the start. oh gee. the way you said it was amazing and so beautiful. this whole poem was amazingly done.

5/5 David

Amen to that!! ^_^

//Khrystyne\\

Excellent!

the concept is awesome, you've describe your topic well, as well its meaning!

keep it up!