This is one of my favorites by you, the flow is exelltent and its just nicely wworded, 5/5

Wow this is a very differnt unique poem, I really like it. Not very many people would look outside and think of that they would only think of their own life. You seem like a very caring person. I think I would call you a bleeding heart. I really liked how you took this poem and made it your own with your own twist. Nice job. the only critique I have is this line "So don't think think when the sun rises" get rid of the second think. I know its just a typo and we all make them. Nice job.

I think this one think its better then the others of yours i have read, although i was rocky to me in one spot other than that it was good!