by Broken Inside He only wants to hurt me May 12, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
A tiny weak child |
I like it. I'm adopted so I can relate. I only saw one spelling error and that was using the wrong to in the second line of the fourth stanza. I enjoyed it overall. I wish there was a little more detail though. Other than that it was good. Four. |
by Brittini
Power poem made me sad. well writen good job i gave yo a 5/5 |
Great way of bringing out the meaning to the reader's!.sad though short poem...it's written well...but maybe a better structure would have made it look a li'l better...anyway |
by Yuna
When reading this poem I got sad. I know that may not be a good thing, but it was really sad. A child not seeing it's first light. Great poem though. You did a great job with it. You got the meaning through, in a short poem, and I think that, that is hard to do! YaY! |
Its pretty good, but you could have made it a little more like a poem and a little more of a better structure, but its retty good, 5/5 |