This poem is great. i love the flow, and emotion.

Same here I love the love the flow and emotions

This was a good poem the flow was good and the subject was gripping to the last word good job.

"i lift my head of the ground to see what i will find" it should be off instead of "of" all of the i's should be capatalized. and lucky shouldnt have a capital. Hmm.. not to sure if I really liked this poem or not I didnt see any other message besides the one that was painted by your words and even then it seemed more like a story instead of a poem. Add some sort of message or feeling to your poetry and it will be ten times better.

Great poem u could go a little more into deatail butt yeh 5/5

This poem brings great suspense...wow... could you please check out my poem, Lottery Represenative and tell me your honest opnion on it... I don't know if I used words correctly in it... I need advice on this poem... you don't have to vote on it... I just need advice... thanks...

Natalie

Wow. very intense poem. very descriptive. excelent use of words. love it!! 5/5

Very well written poem! Enjoyed reading it!

This was quite good, however I feel you could maybe have expressed the emotions a little be clearer? It was interesting though, very sad, too. :[

The imagery you used in this was wonderfully done, it created very vivid pictures for me.
I thought flow was good throughout the poem, and I love the ending, I found it to be very intense and hard hitting.

I think.. as my own opinion maybe trying to change this.. it sounds really good.. but had a little grammar mistake..maybe change from
Driving home after a night out on the town
laughing and carrying on not hearing that sound
to this...
Driving home after a night in town
laughing and carrying on not hearing that sound

but other than that, I really love this poem , it so deep and so emotional;y powerful.. good job 5/5 keep up the good work!!

WOw i just had my friend pass away in a car accident so this poem actually made me cry but i still like it and you still get a 5/5!

R.I.P Hula