Good opening line because of the assonance with 'man' and 'hand', you've also used assonace again with 'down' 'town' and 'ground' which helps the flow of the poem.

the reference to aids seems to be a bit random,apart from rhyming it doesn't seem to give anything to the poem...
and i dont understand this line: 'So many he has in them he must wade.'

apart from these things the rhyming and the repeated lines work really well, so overall: strong beginning and end, adn a good structure, just a couple of things in the middle which im not too sure of :)

kim xx

You seem to do stanza quite well and thats good most poets have a hard time. I myself have issues on thiat point. But the message was abit off I think you were against the whole love thing but thats what I got out of it oh well maybe you will get it next time. Plot121

Ohhh I LOVE this style too! I haven't seen this style before, but I think you managed it wonderfully.
The imagery used created vivid pictures, and I thought the flow was flawless throughout.

Interesting mix of the styles, Monorhyme and Rondel. I liked this one.. I knew as soon as I saw the title in one of the contests that you would choose it. I don't know why, but you seem to do all these crazy titles that I could never write about, but you seem to pull them together and do it beautifully. Thanks for entering and congratulations on second place again! :]