Waterfalls {Quadruple Haiku}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 13, 2007


My own waterfalls,
Like the wind ever-flowing;
Sweet, sweet surrender.

Essence of water,
Cascading in my head,
Sweet, sweet surrender.

Gravity shall not
Contain you to just one space;
You'll splash where you please.

Graivity pulls down.
Crashing on to the ground,
You over rule it.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sora, The Lonely Poet

    I love the way you can quadruple haiku like that. It's a wonderful form of poetry, and Is a lovely poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This my dear is BEAUTIFUL!
    The imagery you used created very vivid pictures, and I was left with a peaceful feeling after reading this.
    It flowed well and I liked the repetition used in the first and second haiku.

  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    The iumages you portrade in this work was done well but towards the end the flow seemed abit off hum nice short poem but would work on making the ending flow more. Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Good idea to put the haiku's together, it makes a nice structure and they flowed together well.
    you're language creates great imagery, describing a very peaceful scene but also giving the waterfall a sort of rebellious character, in that it splashes everywhere refusing to be contained.
    nice work

    kim xx

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