This poem fel t like it was missing something.. it not you. its me.. but it feels emotionless.. for some reason.. I love the choices of words.. but I cannot help you to find something that is missing.. althoughwise you will never learn to become the better poet than you are now.. so that is for me to say and for you to figure out.. so good luck, good job, and keep up with your good work!! love it 4/5 |
by Leah20
I interpreted your poem as a father, maybe a king, dismissing his daughter from his sight because she did something terribly wrong, possibly involving a boy. I really liked this poem great job! |
There is so much packed into such a short poem. Falling out of love on one side of the relationship while being madly in love on the other side. Tis a painful thing. Most people can realte to that in some way. 5/5 for sure! |
I liked it, it was short and got a point across, probably the best short short poem I have seen on here, but I havent been on here that long lol.. |
by Brittany C
Great poem. Another 5/5. |
by x Mo x
Wow....That was very poetic (duh its a poem, of course its poetic), but what I mean is it was straight out enough to make the point, but it didnt beat the read (me) over the head with the point. The words you used were very imgae making. Well Done! |
by Goran Rahim
Wow, i think i have to have a dictionary in my hand to read your poems, but as always your poems are so inspiring because you are one of the most talented writer. |
by Tara Kay
Your vocabulary is amazing, so unique. Well done on such another amazing poem. your flow and imagery was flawless |
Beautiful, open piece of writing. The topic is clear, but the message and the tone are both quite open to the readers' interpretation. Wonerful job. |
by Marc Ortiz
Lol I think I need a dictionary to read this haha. |
by Edward D Zurovec
I love to read poems and find their meaning, This one is the saddest and most appaling to my heart. |