OMG Ciao.. lmao.. I love it hun, I'm glad you had a good time, just nothing too naughty, ok? ^_~ lmao. Love you dearest, and this poem made me laugh. 5/5 ^_^

Much Love,
The Other Half of a Whole Idiot
Your Wifey
.:Danielle:.

Haha, oh Ciao you little Hooch! Lmao, jk. Great story, and I'm sure you had fun, it's good to know that things are going good with you and Ray.

5.5
Heartchuu.

Hmm, i was wondering if you were goin to make a second one, well the flow is perfect and you stayed on track, dirty imagination though, lol, so i give it a 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!

Oh, that ending made me giggle.
I liked this, I thought flow and imagery were wonderfully done, and the worc choice and rhyme scheme are enjoyable.
Nice to know you had fun to lmao

5/5 oh wow thiz poem waz krazy...lol...but i liked it, it waz the bezt poem i read 2day....well keep writing cuz u are really good at it

much luv
peachez

Ha ha ha wat a nice piece. i was spellbound n i felt if i was with u?? he he 5/5

Very cool good job coutose to you

Very well written

Hmmmm.quite interesting, I love it...very well thought out and written, not to mention hot.

Lol i like that but i still ike the first one they are both real good

Really good. once again perfect flow... A masterpiece!! 5/5

Josie

Hmm. almost as good as the otherone, but the flow was off towards the end.

Gosh, i love it! it just left me wanting to read more..
=]
great work
5/5
.x

Wow..that was beautiful...it takes true talent to tell such an amazing story using such simple words, keep up the good work