Dark Angel

by Midnight Sun   May 14, 2007


Her dark hair covered her shamed face as she cried liquid fire. If you looked in her eyes, passed the ivy covered wall, you'd see her shattered spirit.

Her tattered dress fell in the rain and weighed her down more; stopping her from moving on.

But what truly broke her was her fragile wings. So weak they were, the wind broke holes in them. And their veins held the sheer skin over them. This cause them to bow and eventually shrivel.

(I'm watching her decompose)

This girl is the one inside of every woman. And this is who you LET die when you lose your innocence and gain "maturity" ... I'm sorry.

Note: This was a very unusual write for me. I was around ppl who inspired me in weird ways, lol. But I did like how it turned out. Please comment on it so I can get your thoughts and any suggestions you have. Thanks! :)
~Midnight Sun

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  • 17 years ago

    by Life Is Beautiful

    Wow that was really intense....i definitly felt something....good job!

    <3
    Sarah

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Unusual but full of vivid descriptions and that's why i liked it. The ending kind of lost me though...like i'm not sure what you meant. Maybe I'll have to reread it a few times...or you can email and tell me!
    lol
    Charisma*

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Her dark hair covered her shamed face as she cried liquid fire."

    What an amazing opening! "Cried liquid fire", I bloody love that line!! lol
    I loved the whole aspect of this as well, i find it so hard to do free verse like this and you've pulled it off perfectly
    Outstanding sweets!
    5/5
    *Gem*