This was a sad poem with simplicity and I think that that's what made it a great poem. Every stanza gave a sad meaning. Well done
cheers, josh

Excellent. Very simple, not complex, but it flows brilliantly.

"I barely touch the surface,
But a storm brews overhead.
I was looking for a purpose,
But found hopelessness instead."

^ I absolutely adored this stanza. The last line here is just so despairing and makes the reader feel truly sorry for the persona.

Good write.

Wow, I may have gotten the wrong idea out of this...but the idea that I did get I absolutely adore! You have a way of drawing a reader in from the first line and keeping them in until the end where they wish it were longer. Your poems hold so much depth to them. I really enjoyed this one. =]

5.5
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