by dollwithafrown May 15, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Applying makeup in the mirror, she blinks away the salty tears. |
The poem was just a little confusing to me, since the girl is so depressed, yet know one really knows but they just stare anyways... I thought the length of your lines was a little too much, but other than that it was a pretty decent poem. |
Teeth to go. ? = is that like, removable teeth? |
Very powerful ending! great job on this. |
by Fluffy
"Everyday to hide, she does her best, to make her day worthwhile; |
Wow!!!.....beautiful poem..n soo true......just a smiling...n it has so many tears behind it......great work...powerful..n lovely!..sad n simple though..yet well penned! |