This is really good! I used to live on the west side and it anit very good there!

First stanza?
Flow was okay.
Although...
It was eye catching.
Made me want to read more.
[[Glasses]], drugs[[,]] and needles cover all the backyards.
Shouldn't it be glasses?
And after drugs... you forgot to put a comma.
Yet they'll never complain about life being unfair.
You chose words of wisdom.
I love this line.
Your fourth stanza seemed a bit off.
To me, it wasn't as good as your other stanzas.
I don't like your ending for some reason.
It just seemed... expected.
Like for some reason I knew you were going to end with that.
What I felt about it?
I felt as though that you tried and failed to make it powerful.
You tried, though.
I could tell.
But I just didn't have any emotional feelings after that.
Maybe I'm just cold blooded.
I'm sorry if I have been too harsh :[
I'm going to vote a 4/5..
I won't right now, you may not want it.
If you do, PM me.
For right now,
Peace, dearest :]

Great job! i liked this a lot...

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This was well written the flow was flawless, and the emtion was really strong, the imagey was great, I could almost see it playing out in my head. perfect. 5/5

Wow...intense...so different from the other one I read but just as good! Once again, great images, only difference was it was quite as emotional for me. Still another great work though!