This is a real sweet poem it like an inspiring tale. We unconciously direct ourselfs to a life of hatred wen a boy hurts us. They have no idea how weak it makes a girl bt they dont care anyway. This may help a few young girls make them ost out of the real men out there. If you changed one view you have succeeded hun

xxx alex xxx

Hey, i really really loved your poem...it describes me...the girl that i am, insecure, a wreck, helpless and hopeless, waiting for that guy to sweep me off my feet, but never realized before that i dont make it easily, i push away, build up walls, hear things i want to hear n believe others lies, ive had a very hard past, sexually, physcially and emotionally abused..cheated on n hurt too many times to cant, i dont kno how to let go of my past, n let the right guy in, because im too scared of history repeatin its self but i dont wanna be all alone for the rest of my life, any advice?

Very nice!
I think you've read my mind or something
haha it actually made me smile rather then sad
because i've done all those things and I know what it's all about
great poem
5/5

Great Job! I Know how you feel! I have had my heart broken! It flowed really well and it Rhymed good to.. Please keep it up 5/5

I think everyone has felt this way many many times before in their life. It's a little wordy, but it works. Flow is good, nice rhyming scheme...5/5 from me!

LIKE OMG!! So true, you are an inspiration to me, I loved your poem. You are exellent. That is great. OMG!!! You should right more!!!!

Nice job on expressing your emotions.

Someone to be there for you and to hold you tight,
Someone to make you feel like everything is alright...

These lines say so much about love.
Keep writing
Take care Cindy

Thankz guys your comments are much appreciated... keep it up for me..i love knowing what you think!

The dedication truely is cute, i know exactly how you feel. xxx

The dedication truely is cute, i know exactly how you feel. xxx

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The poem was really excellent except some poin
Hun if you shorten the lines and make it as stanzas
It would be flawless
Keep it up,
Laura

This poem is soo true!!...i soo a m sure many many can relate to this.n u've put in beautiful emotions to this heartfelt peice....such "passion yet heartbreak"filled lines.......kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

I think that all of us has had that feeling, so all can relate to this great work.

your servant:
david

It seems kind of forced to me.
Kind of overwhelming as well.
Maybe you could erase a few words, y'know?
For example:
The feeling you get when talking to someone new,
excited, but scared that they will hurt you...
Try to stay away from pronouns.
They usually get overused.
Other than that, it's okay I guess.
Nothing really caught my eye.
But I've definitely read some way worst
Poems than this.
All in all, 4/5?

This is very nice
this is a good topic
I can relate
I bet a lot of people can
its hard fallin in love over again!

So true! Many can relate to this. In the end part flow was great. And i don't think it was forced at all. Like the way you write. Amazing poem. 5/5

Okay...I frikken adore this!
My favourite line is:
''You tell your friends you'll get over them, but you know you really wont...''
That line really stood out to me, I found it to be hardhitting, and filled with depth and feeling...
I particularly enjoyed the ending, it produces thought provoking questions and really makes the reader think.
You did a beautiful job with this.

This is so true.. I love this poem.. Thanks for making this poem! Everyone can relate to this beautiful poem well penned! I really don't like free verse style but this one is really good! well done! 5/5!

Aww this is soo cute i know exactly how youfeel great job i loved it =]