This is what writing is for. helping us release the poet inside, well done.

Wow. Pretty intense. Definitely tells a story-- nice word choice and story line. It really impacts the reader. Nice work!

Well done work!!..kp writing the poem is powerful and the story line is strong...good choice of words...i give a 5/5
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Ps:i think u meant to write "she tried to ease.."...instead of "she tired to ease"..just a thought..i think it sounds sensible this way..tht's it..anyways Good wrk!

Wonderful vivid imagerey. keep up the excellent work, I am loving it.