I Wish I Gave You More (Triolet)

by BeautifulxMess   May 15, 2007


I wish I gave you more.
If only you were still here.
This pain I cannot ignore.
I wish I gave you more.
You are the one I adore.
I want you to always be near.
I wish I gave you more.
If only you were still here.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    This seemed really forced to me.
    Especially when you used the word "adore"
    It seemed cliche.
    Everyone else uses that word.
    I expected something different.
    All in all, it was okay.
    Not great, though...
    4/5 ?

  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow was good the rthyming was good but again it just seemed like you were talking to some one and they had all the answers like why would you give them more who would you give it too these questions would need to be answered if you wish to write for the general public. Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by Miu

    Aww it was interesting poem. Short, great flow, simple to read and sad and sweet same time. Great poem! Keep up the good work! :) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Sydney

    Awh that was good. I dont know if it was supposed to be sad but it was but sweet at the same time XD. Short and wish it had more because its great. 5/5