Its drawing me closer=It's drawing me closer
worn drops on my face=?i did'nt get the meaning
the i was gone =then i/it was gone

lol...tht's it...samantha poimted out the rest of the errors...ignoring these errors...u've done a good job...i myself find it hard to write such poems...beautiful...u've created atmosphere which suits the title...n vivid description..
Good write!
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

I really like this but where it said:

"of lightening and the i was gone" do you mean 'then'. heh, im picky. but loved it!!!

I really like it, to me its a little dark and could be a part of a movie, nice work

Your this peace of workis really great.. next time be carefull to avoid spelling mistake.
take care
5/5

Well done...

The flow was a tad off
do to the shortness and longness of your lines
but the message behind it was good
so nice work

"it(')s drawing me closer" -- to what? And/Or, where?

"like the tears i once [cried] [myself] to sleep with"

Lightening = Lightning

Existingly, this work is in an unsystematic state. First, the title is rather incongruous to its contents. Second, the substance is jumbled with incoherent themes. A revision of this piece is rendered necessary.

Heyy im not goin to point out errows cuz its ur writeing n im bad at spelling i love the poem awesome job

I like this one its short but so descriptive & thanx for being honest about my poem i really appreciate its kinda funny cuz i thought the same things about u did i just couldnt think of a way to fix it