Great wording very understood good write

laura

OH my goodness - this was great - and a little funny (not that I was laughing at the character... but more the feeling of what he was going through - seems very familiar). I liked the end about the church retreat too... good turn in your story - makes you go from feeling sorry for him to a bit of a shock that he's going to church after being on a rocket-fuel induced bender! :)

Good story. Great to read.

Mo

Well this is another cute poem by you. Your poem is having a great lexical power in it. I wanna ask something. Did you use the word "grave" in the 4th line to mean it or you actually wanted to write "great". Anyways its 5/5 for sure. tc

Greatly worded poem and truly excellently written.
Great job, It reminds on some kind of short story, but you kept a form of a poem, which is good.
5/5 from me

This was a great poem. it gave great images & was a little humorous also. the flow was great & the wording was amazing, even though it was off in a few places in my opinion. 4/5

Goshh this is very challenging for me to read this kind of poem! there are some lines are truly deeply emotion and very worded. can't imagine, very excellent job of urs.... great one 5/5

Okay, I found this to be somewhat humouress in certain places.
Anyway.

I really liked this, I found it orginial and unique, and I thought it was beautifully written.

The imagery was fantastic, and the flow was undisturbed throughout the entire piece.

Here's a poem where most people can relate.
The emotion and depth were well done.
This one created pictures that were clear,
usually most 'poets' cannot do that.
Good work with this one.

Great choice of title, the first line was exellent and the rest of the poem living up to the title, fantastic xxx alex xxx

This was awsome, i really liked the last line!

This was awsome, i really liked the last line!