OH MY GAWSH.
I'm laughing my effing butt off.
I found this hillarious?
Hairy fists?
Mwah hah hah hah hah.
Lol.
There's no way I could judge a song.
I don't know the tune or anything.
But still...
This WAS pretty sweet.
I never actually thought
That the person was just lying.
I thought it was comedy.
So I was about to suggest to put it in such.
Although, I think you should've
Added more on the sweetness
It WAS pretty sweet. :]
Especially the last part?
Will you marry me.
I was giggling like a little girl.
ECK!
Stop me. Lol.
5/5, my dearest

Oh god I cracked up at certain places in this, particularly with the line

''Putting you through a beating would be my delight''

I thought the ending was really sweet, and it definitely wasn't something I was expecting which was a nice twist.

I also liked how you showed the major and minor keys etc, as it gave me a better idea to the tune.

I thought this was beautifully and elegantly written, and the ending is just so booootiful!

This love hate thing is just kicking my butt. I hope you could stick with one subject and stay on its course it would lkead for a much better write as a whole Plot121

Wow...
this was so good!!!
the twist at the end was completely awesome...
at the beginning, i was like, this is a lost love poem about someone who's not giving a damn...and then...the "will you marry me" part just knocked me off...
to shorten this up a little bit, it was a very good written poem, it would give an amazing song, it was just awesome...
keep going =)
*isabel*

Wow at first I thought it was a poem based on anger but at the end it was completly different because I thought that this Marry person was like a big jerk so the whole "Will you marry me thing threw me off" Now I see why its under the love category. I liked it, because it showes that sometimes love existes in the most random of places. The only thing I would change is getting rid of some of the "Ohh my my my" (S) they can be a bit repetative.

Everyone said they laughed reading this, i didn't. i loved the poem, i read it because it was in the same contest as one of mine, and i thought SH*T this is good lol, but no really it is amazing. i am in awe of this poem. i didn't find it funny at all i thought the first bit was full of anger and i loved the whole meaning and the unexpectedness of this poem it was so sweet and i loved the line,
something along the lines of, "i know this is sudden but i can hardly breathe" amazing amazing amazing.

enough said,
espoir
xxx